Session 3
Schenker in her article says that in the future, houses will be networked making people’s life easy and comfortable. The electronic devices will be connected to internet and will have special chips to control different activities like housework, communications, shopping bills or people’s social life. The disadvantages of having a networked home do not seem to be significant. People will have to pay some extra dollars for the chips, the connection to internet and the security measures to protect the system against cyber pirating. People will not afford the maintenance because the services will repair themselves. The author concludes that the money will not mean much considering all the benefits of having a smart house.
Session 4
This study went through over 1,600 marginal and end comments written on 110 first drafts of essays by 47 ESL students considering both the pragmatic and the linguistic features of each comment. Drafts of each individual essay were examine to observe the influence of the first draft commentary on the students’ revisions and assess whether the changes that were made in response to the teacher‘s feedback improved the essays. The author thinks that a proportion of the comment led to student revision, and that there were types of commentary more helpful than others. The results are suggestive of several implications for L2 writing instruction and for the future studies on a vital but neglected topic.
As a recommendation, you should write down the number of words that you reduced at the end, so we can compare each paragraph with ours. besides that, the techniques were used appropiately, congrats!
ResponderEliminarHi, i liked how you summarized the paragraph, i would recommend you to select a picture more acording to the topic, it will capture readers´ attention better. good job!.
ResponderEliminarYou are right ligia, I would take that into account. thank you!
ResponderEliminarDear Viviana,
ResponderEliminarExcellent job.